Strike a match in the dark
hear sulphur guiding your eye to flame
illumination takes many forms
one is that of retrospect
do not repeat do not repeat
the error of your heart
I saw your blisters I saw your callouses
I saw myself underneath the train
as it bit into who I was before I began
following empty tracks
it was always going to happen
I wrote the play before the players were born
they inherit their roles as if I were
the man in the sky and they my pawn
but it was not so
I was only a woman lost in herself
and you were just people who couldn’t see
far ahead
I watched you before you knew
the steps you would take
leading to my end
how you were born to strike me out
leaving nothing but the smell of
something cold
you can become strangers with the
closest person in the world
watching them as they step into their part
you always knew they’d take that route
perhaps you paved the way
perhaps you died before you could taste
the ash of their betrayal
Oh wow. 💖
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Candice Louisa Daquin/The Feathered Sleep
” you can become strangers with the closest person in the world “… This is so powerful because it happens so frequently. Think of what is said during wedding vows with the person you confess to wanting to be with forever. And how quickly it can all fall apart. How is it we can come to hurt the person we promised we couldn’t live without? Thank you for sharing your gift!
Or in times of great pain and loss you can cling to those who would NEVER betray you and suckle from them the strength you need to carry on! 🙂 ❤
“you can become strangers with the / closest person in the world” and more often than not closer to the strangest person in the world; this is a touching piece
Two others have picked up the line that was key for me. Awfully sad
This is wonderfully power.
The last lines:
perhaps you died before you could taste
the ash of their betrayal
Those strike the hardest! ❤
xo (yes)
I knew you’d see that part and get it. Thank you. I think we may have been separated at birth 😉 xo (thank you)
YES!
You are very welcome and appreciated Rick thank you
Thank you SO much SDLC ROCKS !
There she is, the girl with curls in her thoughts xo (hugs)
Thank you lovely Eric so much
You are welcome, Lovely Shieldmaiden, so much. ❤
Power in each word
Aww 😊😊💕 Hugs, love.
Maybe we were 😉 xo
We think you rock too!
These lines: hit the emotional impact.
perhaps you died before you could taste
the ash of their betrayal
The fear really hits you. That’s what you feel first. And then it’s the anger and frustration. Part of the problem is how little we understand about the ultimate betrayal of the body when it rebels against itself. ~ Charles Bronson
The heart feels stricken. Powerful poem.
GREAT quote. xo
Damn fine club we’re in then isn’t it? 😉
🙂 Knew you’d love it. 🙂
I’m with Eric (what a surprise) here. The ending is so powerful for me (the rest also, but you know what I mean)
I wrote it for you because of you and in tribute to your beautiful strength
And I thank you and love you for it (because now I HAVE to be as kickass as this, don’t I?)
(Yes!) 😉
I was going to say Joan of Arc but truthfully she was too neurotic about religion so let’s go with Boudica though she’s not French she was some lean machine all right.