What’s beneath the sound?

The woman in a short fur coat

looks good on her though

faux fur ages most

save the very young and broken

with blackened eyes and sore cheeks

she defies rules

thin wristed yet strong

muscles hidden beneath boiled wool

it is speculation that excites

what’s beneath the sound?

of her stockings against their silk lining

the chimeric of her cleaving

slim to rising, freckles in sunlight

how many years did she?

dip her blood red toes from the pier in blue one piece

the steps are painted white

reflecting sun

taking shelter in place

once a ballet dancer

learning her shape

years scrape

against bone

long the thought

then skin is sloughed

and scales shimmer

beneath the grey and green



33 thoughts on “What’s beneath the sound?

  1. “Learning her shape, years scrape ” is so beautifully written for this but is allegorical for just about everyone. Young people start out learning the shape of their careers while the years scrape by and scrape away at what they really waned to be vs what they ended up doing. Thank you for sharing your gifts.

  2. Oh Candice, you’re absolutely brilliant and I like the final image of her drifting away through the waves. ❤

  3. I Liked it too! I found it on Deviant Art, I should have made a note of the artist, I always mean to and forget. It’s really a great interpretation of the red shoes, I was talking with another blogger about that film and that’s what inspired me to look for paintings of it. xo Thank you lovely fin xo

  4. So vividly put. It takes many a year to learn the ‘shape’, be it mind, life or just the exact ‘shape’ of the feminine figure in which she would look ‘perfect’ in the eyes of the beholders…

  5. PS don’t worry I’m not into criticism either so you’re okay there, but the weird thing is every time I try to open it – well it doesn’t open even if I cut and paste it

  6. Hehe, I know the feeling. It is really nicely done! (Deviantart has some great stuff) It adds a little something extra to your poem too (or your poem to the painting, depending which direction one looks at it) 🙂

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