The compartment car is mostly steel
Or some approximate
Covered with the languid stains left
Of embarkation
She
Has thick calves
A girl told her once, as they sat cross-legged deciding whether to emulate
A kissing scene from The Breakfast Club
She was no Molly, her legs had strength, once she danced from midnight to 5am in a cage
For fifty dollars and now she knows
How long she can stand, without needing to stop.
The linoleum is probably doused in chemicals
Every Thursday by a white haired man with heavy shoulders, from stooping
Her skin touched the plastic, hotly
And like a rejected lover, pulled away, only to return when
The train drew a breath and weazed into another
Convulsion of movement
Her hands
Prematurely wrinkled
From painting and the liberal use of terpentine
Back then she paid no heed, dropping cigarette ash
Hoping for fire.
A lover once remarked
On the halo her blonde hair made
He said she was a Botticelli angel
She could never give him a decent hand job
After that.
As the train lurches into the future
Whiskering through wilds with man-made egotism
She felt the coolness of her underwear
The rise and fall of her perfumed arms, pressed in unnatural obedience
A scab on her elbow begin to itch
The dark shapes scurrying beyond
Her artificially lit box
And anything
Just then
Was absurd and fast and possible
I like it, very well written.
Quite a build up – whoa 🙂
Portrait of a woman in motion. Wow
Reblogged this on cabbagesandkings524 and commented:
TheFeatheredSleep – A woman sits on a train. Simple? Oh, there’s more to it than that.
Your poems are wonderfully crafted. Thank you for sharing them with us.
You got me at hand jobs – lol !!!!
Excruciating imagery
This all captivates me. But one part demands to stay with me:
Back then she paid no heed, dropping cigarette ash
Hoping for fire.
Like a bukowski but some how more I dunno eloquent
💓
Your metaphor and simile puts he reader (me) in the rail car, waiting in the station for the journey to begin. Feeling as if the lady sitting across liked to talk …
Phewww you’re good!
Right? I decided that imagining what the woman was thinking would be an exciting way into the portrait. I’m glad it worked